OOC - Recommendation: proof read before you post

Previous Post: After Ke-me and the other clone troupers got settled the decided to take look around the planet. They cleared it with Luna and Vain first. They also had there communicators on them so that they could be called back should they be needed. They took little time to find the area of the planet that had the highest crime rate. “ alright guys try and blend in if we are going to find out anything regarding the huts or the corruption in the planets leadership this may be the best place to start”...

After Proofreading and correction: After Ke-Ke and the clone troopers got settled they decided to take look around the planet. They cleared it with Luna and Vain first. They also had their communicators on them so that they could be called back should they be needed. They took little time to find the area of the planet that had the highest crime rate. “ Alright, guys try and blend in. If we are going to find out anything regarding the Huts or the corruption in the leadership of the planet this may be the best place to start."

Spelling, Grammar, and some syntax cleaned up and it reads better. To be fair. However, a little more information would help this post strengthen the story, such s descriptive elements like environment, Ke-Ke's mood, where are they landing? Who greets them? What time of day? etc. maybe three paragraphs instead of one quick blurb. Trying to help.

Joe.

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