Calvedo VI: Help me build a better world!

Hey folks, I am slowly, slowly turning the gears to try to launch a game I have in my headspace. However, since I realize that it's really hard to write for a game that only exists in somebody else's imagination, I am trying to scratch out some legible documentation for the game's setting and background.

Here's what I have so far: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1S9d376UU3dMclPYh_uuSk4wDUfaEbrs8yysDqIltD28/edit?usp=sharing

What I could use feedback on is:
- What's currently missing? If you were making a character, what other info would you find helpful.
- What could be made more clear?
- What's compelling or perhaps very not-compelling about the setting?

Feel free to leave feedback on this post, or in the GDocs comments.

Thanks!

< Prev : Things That All Ongoing Worlds Members Should Know Part 3 Next > : Nations among the stars (New Game)